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Below 6 separate essays scored -- at each of the TWE levels 1-6. This study session is designed to familiarize you with what is expected at each level. In the exercise which follows, you will be presented with 6 essays and YOU will need to decide what level each essay has attained.
The suggested order is that you FIRST read and digest the essays below; THEN, proceed to the exercise. This is the method in order to best advance your learning experience through this program.
Today is day 11 of the month and so here is today's batch of 6 multi-leveled essays.12. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students'' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Score 6.0 Demonstrates clear competence in writing on both the rhetorical and syntactic levels, though it may have occasional errors. A paper in this category effectively addresses the writing task is well organized and well developed uses clearly appropriate details to support a thesis or illustrate ideas displays consistent facility in the use of language demonstrates syntactic variety and appropriate word choice
"Education should not just be limited to the development of the intellect of a student, it should be an overall development of the student's personality. Along with academic growth, physical development of the students should be a part of the education a student gets. Therefore, universities imparting education to students should give equal attention to sports and academics. Sports bring out the competitive spirit in a person, thus building confidence in the individual. Whether it is a team game or an individual sport, the chance to compete with others in the same group and the urge to perform well on a sports ground builds confidence in a student. Participating in a team sport enhances a student's ability to interact with people around and to coordinate with others. This confidence and ability to share holds them in good stead when they interact with others in the society. There have been many such examples of great sportsperson in the past, such as soccer star Pele or basketball champion Magic Johnson, who have gone ahead to become good ambassadors of sports in the society. A student's capability should not be judged alone on his or her academic results. It may happen that a student not doing well in his studies might turn out to be a very able sportsperson. Teachers interacting with such students should be sensitive enough to identify such potential in the students and help them develop their talent in sports. The sports facilities available in the universities go a long way in creating interest among students towards sports. It would be rather sad if a talented student is not able to pursue his or her field of sport due to lack of facilities. Universities should make sure that proper infrastructure is provided to the students and students with potential are awarded for their achievements. To conclude, I would say that for overall development of students, universities should spend equal amount of money on sports as they spend on acquiring books and other library material."
Score 5.0 Demonstrates competence in writing on both the rhetorical and syntactic levels, though it will probably have occasional errors. A paper in this category may address some parts of the task more effectively than others is generally well organized and developed uses details to support a thesis or illustrate an idea displays facility in the use of language demonstrates some syntactic variety and range of vocabulary
It is rightly said, "All day work and no play makes Jack a dull boy." Its human tendency that we get bored when we work a lot. Sports acts as a refreshing medium for us after the long mental pressure we undergo by studying. When I talk about sports, it need not be any outdoor game. It could be any kind of indoor experience.
When I am really exhausted after studying the whole day, the most refreshing thing to do is play some game. This break really helps me grasp things faster. Various studies say that playing any kind of sport helps physical as well as mental growth. Promoting sports at universities will allow the students to take up this field as their career. These students can then represent their Universities at National as well as International level. At many places, there are reservations for sportspersons. For example, when you go for a job or higher studies, this reservation makes you a privileged candidate. If we talk in terms of money, sports is a vast field where you can earn a lot. Money can also be a motivating factor for the students to take sports as a career. Players who win various titles, such as French Open, Wimbledon are rewarded millions of dollars. I feel that they should fund their sports department with the same amount as they fund their libraries. Students will take interest in sports if proper facilities are provided. This is possible only if adequate monetary help is provided to the sports department by the university. Therefore, universities should encourage students to participate in sports for their overall development.
Score 4.0 Demonstrates minimal competence in writing on both the rhetorical and syntactic levels. A paper in this category addresses the writing topic adequately but may slight parts of the task is adequately organized and developed uses some details to support a thesis or illustrate an idea demonstrates adequate but possibly inconsistent facility with syntax and usage may contain some errors that occasionally obscure meaning
The mind has always been a mystery to us. The mind works a lot. Some scientists say that the mind works even when our physical body does not. The mind is the perpetuator of my creations. Needless to say a mind like our body must be healthy. It is true that an healthy mind is a mind full of information. That is why all universities have a library. A library is the best place to obtain information on a variety of subjects.
However, the question arise, if it is sufficient to just go to the library to be a genius. The answer to that would be no. The reason being, although a library is a the treasury of all knowledge, a dull mind will not be able to absorb this knowledge if it is not active. It is common knowledge that, every human being must exercise at least three times a week to maintain a healthy body. This applies to the mind also. We can exercise by going to the gymnasium or by playing a sport of our liking. That is precisely why, sports is part of the curriculum in universities. for example student who is tensed will perform badly in an exams as opposed to a student who is not. This is because tension and worry are biological reactions, which can be eliminated when he or she exercises or plays a sport. Also, doctors and scientists believe that the mind is at its sharpest after a work-out session or when a person.
Secondly, playing a sport requires a student to use his or her intelligence to win a game. For example, a player must decide on the strategy to use before playing a game. Not only that, the player must be intelligent enough to change strategies in the midst of the game to alter the course of the game to his or her advantage. Hence, sports creates a intelligent student Apart, from toning up the mind, sports is a way to lure students to university. Many universities award scholarships for students who excel in sports. Students who excel in sports join universities so they can continue their sports while they get a university education which is a basis for a career.
In essence as sports helps create an active and intelligent mind besides getting students to take up university education. Considering that sports helps a student in achieving a university degree as much as a library does, both in terms of I would conclude that universities must allocate both libraries and sports activities the same amount of funds.
Score 3.0 Demonstrates some developing competence in writing, but it remains flawed on either the rhetorical or syntactic level, or both. A paper in this category may reveal one or more of the following weaknesses: inadequate organization or development inappropriate or insufficient details to support or illustrate generalizations a noticeably inappropriate choice of words or word forms an accumulation of errors in sentence structure and/or usage
There is lots of ways in which universities invest their money. Some universities would rather give to their student's sports activities better than their libraries, however sometimes what occurs to some of the universities are the opposite.
If the university provides a variety of title of books and materials, students don't have to waste their time looking for books or articles somewhere else which can be very tiring sometimes.
In my opinion, sports activities play a important role in everybody's life not only students. Universities willing to invest their money in sport activities would encouraje many students to exercise more.
In conclusion, I would say, universities willing to give the same amount of money in libraries and sport activities would attractive to both a athlete and a lover reader.
Score 2.0 Suggests incompetence in writing. A paper in this category is seriously flawed by one or more of the following weaknesses: serious disorganization or underdevelopment little or no detail, or irrelevant specifics serious and frequent errors in sentence structure or usage serious problems with focus
Sports are as important a part of any curriculum as study are. Unfortunately, universities spend more money in buying books, soft wares and maintaining their libraries than in sports. The money spend on sports should be the same as more to that on libraries. Money be used to help athlete succeed in compete.
Score 1.0 Demonstrates incompetence in writing. A paper in this category may be incoherent may be undeveloped may contain severe and persistent writing errors
Personally, I enjoy soccer. I was member of soccer group in my country. I play on both offesne and defense. Our team is good team we have record of 12 win and five loses. Be a part of the team teach work in group it help me learn many thing.