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Below 6 separate essays scored -- at each of the TWE levels 1-6. This study session is designed to familiarize you with what is expected at each level. In the exercise which follows, you will be presented with 6 essays and YOU will need to decide what level each essay has attained.
The suggested order is that you FIRST read and digest the essays below; THEN, proceed to the exercise. This is the method in order to best advance your learning experience through this program.
Today is day 30 of the month and so here is today's batch of 6 multi-leveled essays.30. Use examples and reasons to explain your answer to the following question: How do mass media (television, film and radio) influence children's behavior?
Score 6.0
Demonstrates clear competence in writing on both the rhetorical and syntactic levels, though it may have occasional errors. A paper in this category
effectively addresses the writing task
is well organized and well developed
uses clearly appropriate details to support a thesis or illustrate ideas
displays consistent facility in the use of language
demonstrates syntactic variety and appropriate word choice
A child's behavior is easily influenced by anything he sees or hears. Which is why, mass media influences a child's behavior to a great extent. The aspects of behavior that are influenced are talking style, interaction skills and general awareness.
Talking style of a child is greatly influenced by mass media. A child tries to imitate whatever he sees or hears in television, films and on radio. If the child likes a particular actor in film and television, he will try to imitate that actor's talking style.
Mass media also influences how a child interacts with friends or neighbors. If the child sees television shows and films where people are hostile towards each other, the child is likely to imbibe this attitude in him. On the other hand, if the shows and films he watches depict a friendly environment, the child is likely to interact pleasantly with friends and neighbors.
The more a child is exposed to mass media, the more likely is his general awareness. If the child listens to news, he knows about current affairs. If he watches channels like Animal Planet and Discovery, he will have a strong knowledge about plants and animals. This knowledge is reflected when a child converses with anyone.
To conclude we can say that mass media has a great influence on children's behavior. The influence can be positive or negative, depending on the child's surroundings and upbringing.
Score 5.0
Demonstrates competence in writing on both the rhetorical and syntactic levels, though it will probably have occasional errors. A paper in this category
may address some parts of the task more effectively than others
is generally well organized and developed
uses details to support a thesis or illustrate an idea
displays facility in the use of language
demonstrates some syntactic variety and range of vocabulary
What would life be without movies, latest updates of news on television or, latest songs on radio.These are some of things being echoed by people around the world. The industrial revolution resulted in some of the media-oriented inventions, which have changed the lives of everyone around the globe.
The prime amongst these inventions have been television, films or motion picture, and radio. The influence of these media has been so compelling that people have started scheduling their lives according to the programme schedules of their latest movies or TV or shows. The influence of these media has been equivocal on every segment of the society.
The children have also faced the influence of media, which has significantly affected their behavior. Children grow up enjoying the chase between TOM and Jerry, or admiring abilities of Michael Jackson on the dance floor or the power of Sylvester Stallon while putting his fist on the face of villians. These acts mold the behavior of children to such an extent that they try to imitate them while in company of their friend or relatives.
The influence on children has been noth positive as well as negative. With the frame of of mind to ape their heroes on stage or on field, children, adolescents and teensagers have started asking for more and more pocket money from their parents to buy the clothes or shoes which their role models sport.
The bonus of negating the negative influence of these media agents lies not only on the show producers but also on the parents and societies. If more and more information-based and educative programmes are aired through these mediums children can grow up admiring Einsteins, or the nature by seeing killer whales as they perform their dance in the Oceans and seas.
Score 4.0
Demonstrates minimal competence in writing on both the rhetorical and syntactic levels.
A paper in this category
addresses the writing topic adequately but may slight parts of the task
is adequately organized and developed
uses some details to support a thesis or illustrate an idea
demonstrates adequate but possibly inconsistent facility with syntax and usage
may contain some errors that occasionally obscure meaning
At the present time the mass media have many influence children's behavior. Majority of children like to watch television, film or listen to the radio almost everyday. Therefore it is easy for these children to accept and infiltrate good information or bad information form this the mass media.
For example when children watch television, film about battle or see movies about to dispute and struggle. It make these children to remember and imitate bad information. Then this children will be aggress, feel high pressure and violent opinian too. Finally these children will display this bad behavior to connect on all sides people. Sometime these children may be bandit in the futher if they have accumulate many these bad behavior and habitual.
At last probably it is a big social problem. Such as last year the boy shot his friend dead in high school. Some case the children were addicted to drugs or thief.
On the other hand if the children take advantage from the mass media. For instance
when the children see the movies about science, invention, natural, a hero,
or environment. This movies can help omprove and
develop knowledge, ability, skill better in the future.
Therefore the children ought to consider that take advantage more than disadvantage from all the mass media and their parents should take care children too.
Score 3.0
Demonstrates some developing competence in writing, but it remains flawed on either the rhetorical or syntactic level, or both. A paper in this category may reveal one or more of the following weaknesses:
inadequate organization or development
inappropriate or insufficient details to support or illustrate generalizations
a noticeably inappropriate choice of words or word forms
an accumulation of errors in sentence structure and/or usage
Mass media is very important information source for us as well as children. We can get some information from that. We scan only information, because we have already known right behavior. But children that haven't known behavior yet may assume their doing right behavior. In brief, they may copy actor's doing.
If it is news on TV, it's no problem, because the newscaster is usually polite people. But if it is comedy program on TV, children will be impolite people. The actor who play a funny person sometaimes does coarse behavior. It's very interesting for children, so they may be influence by it, and copy it in front of their friends. The people that can prevent from it are only their parents.
If they behave theirselves good person, and the children love their parents, the children may copy thier parents' doing rather than the actor's doing.
Score 2.0
Suggests incompetence in writing. A paper in this category is seriously flawed by one or more of the following weaknesses:
serious disorganization or underdevelopment
little or no detail, or irrelevant specifics
serious and frequent errors in sentence structure or usage
serious problems with focus
Media such as Tv affect child bad. One time Japanese kid watch TV a lot times cut off a head of firend and placed head on a stick. It was an example of kid affected by watching something on TV and then act out in reality. I think we should change what we watch on TV so that problems like these do not happen again. We should control Tv and other forms of media. Because they affect a child's behavior.
Score 1.0
Demonstrates incompetence in writing.
A paper in this category
may be incoherent
may be undeveloped
may contain severe and persistent writing errors
My favorite hobby is movies. Movie can make me happy and help me not think about worry things. So I think that movies can also help other to be happy and less worry too. You should watch movie also that way you will see lively things and many actions.