In this exercise, you will practice scoring sample essays. Your goal is to get within one point of the original score. If you are consistently discrepant (i.e., your score differs by more than a point) in your scoring, you should go back to the "Sample Set Essays" of the Day Web Page to become more familiar with scored TWE essays. You will have achieved mastery of this exercise after accurately scoring two sample sets of essays or until you feel confident scoring TWE essays.
Read the following essays and score them from one to six. Refer to TWE scoring guide as you score the essays.
Today is day 21 of the month and so here is today's randomly ordered batch of TWE essays.
Exercise Twenty-two
Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Every year the earth damaged by human and human' devices, car, motorcycle, ship etc. Someone didn't notice that the earth, which gives us a place to sleep; is damaged by ourselves. We can notice from the amount of trees in the forest, the air and water pollution and the decreasing of animal population.
The trees in the forest all over the earth are cut down everyday because of needs of human, a place to live, food and etc. The increasing of human population increases the needs of food and place to live then people cut down the trees and change them to furniture, houses and food. Trees are lungs of the earth if we cut down all the trees, the lungs of the earth die and also ourselves.
The air and water pollution are 2 of the most important problem in the earth.
Because the human' factories produce the dirty air and water to the environment.
These pollutions destroy our nature. If the dirty water flows into the river,
sea and the ocean, it will reduce the oxygen in the water and the living creatures
in the ocean will die. And the dirty air make the
rain become an acid rain, which kills every creatures in the world.
The amount of animals on earth is decreasing according to the reduction of
trees and the air and water pollution. The animals in the ocean cannot live
in the dirty water that comes from the human' factories and after they
receive the acid from the dirty water for a long time they must die. And the
animals in land cannot live without the pure water and the clean air, which
come from trees in the forest.
While we destroy the earth, please know that we destroy ourselves at the same and the destroyed earth will revenge and destroy us. We can help ourselves, animals, trees and the earth by using the resources in the world efficiently and stop cutting down the trees which are the earth' lungs.
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The entrepreneurs believe that human beings have made the Earth a better place to live in by their inventions and experiments. The scientists and environmentalists have a different outlook and say that mankind has harmed Earth in more than one ways. I strongly believe that human activity is damaging the Earth everyday.
To provide opportunities and space for the rising population, many trees are cut everyday. This deforestation results in soil erosion. The decrease in the number of trees and forests makes the survival of animal life difficult. Both animals and human beings are an important part of the nature. The reduction in the green belt on the earth has resulted in a number of problems for both animals and human beings.
Animals are killed for meat, skin, and other precious products. Even animals are tortured to use them for races, farming, carrying load. There are many people who keep pets but do not take care of their pets properly. Animals are used in circus and made to perform under strict and unhygienic and unnatural conditions. Many species have become extinct due to the interest of many of fellow human beings in shooting and poaching.
Felling trees and slaughtering animals is not the only way the Earth is being harmed everyday. For convenience and other purposes, the path of many rivers is changed. Cutting of plateau and mountains to make tracks, passages, and hotels is also common. The disposal of industrial, domestic, and medical in the rivers has made many clear rivers become a home for the most dreadful diseases.
The Earth is facing a great danger due to carefree attitude of the human beings. Human beings are harming the planet they are living in by felling trees, killing animals, and destroying the parts of nature. This disturbs the ecological balance and puts the Earth in danger.
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People have the different opinions about the Earth. Some people think the Earth is being damaged by human activity, but others think the Earth becomes a better place to live. Because of the development of technology, most people don''t care about the nature environment of the Earth any more; they just consider about how to make their life more convenient. Therefore I prefer the former opinion.
Although the human activities really make the Earth become a better place for people to live, they still damage the whole Earth''s environment and bring some problems to people. For example, acid rain becomes a big problem for people who live on this planet. Because people don''t notice the balance of lumbering and forestation, they make the rain forests decrease by a rapid speed. And the waste gas by industries also will make the forests get damaged. The acid rain that caused by these two factors will not only harm people, but also the whole environment.
From the point of human activity, people''s life becomes better than before by new inventions. However, most people forget that the most thing that support our life come from the nature. Once the nature of Earth is destroyed by human activity, we cannot live on this planet any more. So how human activity makes the human''s life become better under the undamaged Earth''s environment is the first step to solve this situation.
Briefly speaking, I agree the opinion that the Earth is being harmed by human activity. So I think no matter what activity we take, we must think about the nature environment of this Planet. Because of we just have one and only one Earth. If we don''t protect this planet, we will destroy ourselves on our own.
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First reason for position is that human invention makes our live more convenient. Human activity change the original Earth and make the Earth a better environment to live. The second reason is that we need to promote the development of the Earth.
Of course, there is also an argument to be made for other answers as well. I am sure there are many things that I failed mention. Nevertheless, for the reasons I have present above, I believe that my opinion is the most valid.
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Human activitie build better place for people to live, but it destroy the place people are live. We want to get benefit from our activities which we make to Earth. So we need to be carefule about the activities we act.
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We exhausted much natural resources for the improvement of our lives. As a result, we have to confront this serious issue now.
We already know that we should save our important resources, but we tend to be selfish thinking that we can use it fully while we live. Indeed, We can live thanks to it. Therefore, we have to think about it seriously.
We face to the difficult phase now. For instance, ozon layer was destroyed guradually. Forests are cutting down and become desertification. Fossil fuel is also exhausted more and more.
On the other hand, there are project such as developping Mars and bottom of the sea to be able to live people. It might be good idea as solving less resources and preventing deforestation.
When we think about our offsprings, we have to think about conservation of natural resources at the same time.
Correct Answers:
A. 4.0
B. 6.0
C. 5.0
D. 2.0
E. 1.0
F. 3.0