I do think these people such as famous athletes and entertainers deserve millions of dollars for salary each year. Yes, these high salaries seem incredible for ordinary poeple. However, these famous athletes and entertainers strive to be good in the area they worked and get what they deserved.

To be a famous athletes is not as easy as someone just dreamed. A excellent athletes's success is exchanged by so many efforts. The hard practices and daily trainings are the things that behind these fames. When they achieve the success, they may earn high values of rewards. But these high reward compares with what they spent for training would become nothing. These is a famous chinese Ping-pang ball female althele named Ping. She earned so many first places among world's high Ping-pang ball conpetitions. Let us look back the road she worked before these achievements, there are so many "tears with blood" pactices she did. In the age about five, Ping had started her Ping-pang ball practice. Since that time, she had lost numerous free time shared with her same age friends. When the time others playing, she was the only one who practiced beside the Ping-pang table. After this story, you may think the high salaies for famous athletes is suitable.

The entertainers's road to their achievement is also as difficult as what the famous altheles did. Entertainers is one of most competed job which required high personal capabilities. The public is very critized to these entertainers as well as the audiences. A famous entertiner earns what she or he just get is very fair.

The famous athletes and entertainers earn miilions of dollars every year to exchange what they paid before their get successes is just fine. Let us support these famous people by give them high salaries.

I do think people such as famous athletes and entertainers deserve millions of dollars in salary each year. Yes, these high salaries seem exhorbitant to ordinary poeple. However, these famous athletes and entertainers strive for excellence in the area they work and get what they deserve.

To be a famous athlete is not as easy as someone may imagine. A excellent athletes's success is exchanged for many efforts. Hard practice and daily training are the ingredients behind these successes. When they become successful, they may earn substantial rewards. But these rewards compensate for what they spent for training without which they would become nothing. These is a famous Chinese ping-pang ball female althele named Ping. She earned many first places among the world's top ping-pang ball competitions. However, let us look back at the road she worked before these achievements in which there were so many "blood, sweat and tears" sessions. From the age of five, Ping had started her ping-pang practice. Since then, she had sacrificed much of her free time with her peers. When others were playing, she was the only one who practiced at the ping-pang table. This story may make one rethink the position that high salaries for famous athletes is unjustified.

An entertainers's road to achievement is as difficult as the famous althele's. Entertainment is one of most competitive jobs requiring strong individual capabilities. The public is very critical to entertainers and so are audiences. Likewise, that a famous entertainer earns what she or he gets seems very fair.

The famous athletes and entertainers earn miilions of dollars every year in exchange for what they paid before getting their success. In short, let us support these famous people by give them high salaries.

I do think these people such as famous athletes and

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entertainers deserve millions of dollars for salary

- for their salaries OR in salary each year.

Yes, these high salaries seem incredible

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for ordinary poeple. However, these famous athletes

- to NOT for

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and entertainers strive to be good in the area they

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worked and get what they deserved.

- deserve (better: deserve what they get.)

To be a famous athletes is not as easy as someone just

- athlete

- as someone may dream.

dreamed. A excellent athletes's success is exchanged by so many efforts. The hard practices and daily

- is exchanged for many efforts.

- 'practice' is used in the singular only; if you want plural, you need 'practice sessions'

trainings are the things that behind these fames. When

- training; see 'practice' above

- ... are the ingredients behind the fame. (avoid words like "thing")

they achieve the success, they may earn high values

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- to earn substantial rewards

of rewards. But these high reward compares with what

- rewards

- compensate for what

they spent for training would become nothing. These is

- spent in training

- without which they would become nothing.

- There is a famous chinese Ping-pang ball female althele named

- Chinese

- ping-pong

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Ping. She earned so many first places among world's

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- in the top world ping-pong competitions.

high Ping-pang ball conpetitions. Let us look back the

- However, let us ...

- to look back at

- achievements in which there are

so many "tears with blood" pactices she did. In the

- there were numerous "blood, sweat and tears" sessions.

age about five, Ping had started her Ping-pang ball

- From the age of five,

practice. Since that time, she had lost numerous free

- Since then,

- she sacrificed

- 'numerous' is used only for count nouns

time shared with her same age friends. When the time

- with her peers. others playing, she was the only one who practiced

- When the others were playing,

beside the Ping-pang table. After this story, you may

- at

think the high salaies for famous athletes is suitable.

- This story may make one rethink the position that high salaries for famous athletes is unjustified.

The entertainers's road to their achievement is also

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as difficult as what the famous altheles did.

- as difficult as the famous athlete's.

Entertainers is one of most competed job which required high personal capabilities. The public is

- Entertainment is one of the most competitive jobs

- which requires

very critized to these entertainers as well as the

- critical of audiences.

A famous entertiner earns what she or he just get is very fair.

- Therefore, a famous entertiner's earnings seems entirely fair.

The famous athletes and entertainers earn miilions of

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dollars every year to exchange what they paid before

- ... year in exchange for what ...

- they were paid their get successes is just fine. Let us support these

- success came their way

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- In short, let us ...

famous people by give them high salaries.